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Not much to say about this one, as it's a setup chapter. Got a post-Okinawa chapter in the works, with more Fuyu tomorrow.

April 20, 2022

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And the aftermath, separated because it's in the wee hours of the following morning:

August 22, 2021

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Okay, new chapter! Sorry it's late, edits are a bitch. I'm sure it's not done, but I wanna get it out there and get feedback. Please be gentle.  :'(

August 21, 2021

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And the lemon (i.e., don't read if you're squicked by acts between consenting adults):

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Okay, lots of changes. The date of Kaji's return is shifted to March of 2021. Minor changes to the last part of the previous scene. And, finally, a new scene! My experiments with callbacks haven't worked well in the past, but I think I maybe I got it right this time. We'll see what y'all think. Here we go:

August 15, 2021

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And some familiar faces! More on this date later, but I'm tired and drunk now so it will have to wait 'til tomorrow:

August 14, 2021

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Okay! Parts 1 and 2 of O-ki-na-wa! Nothing momentous here, it's all setup. But hopefully it's enjoyable! Please let me know what you think!

July 23, 2021

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I wasn't planning to do anything with Kaji for a long while. I was planning to work on Fuyutsuki, and O-ki-na-wa!, and had the latter worked out to something like ten scenes. But today, Kaji showed up and laid a hand on my shoulder and said, "Hey, how 'bout this?" Thankfully, he didn't try to seduce me.


March 6, 2021

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Shadowjack said something about the non-linear nature of the fic working in such a way that any given scene informs both the scenes that came before and the scenes that came after, so maybe a bit of that will kick in here. But in any event, this is my thinking on the subject: the "supplemental information" goes far beyond Misato's advances on Shinji. It also covers her neglect of Asuka, Nerv's treatment of Rei, and the general lack of care offered the kids while they were Pilots. And I think this revelation on her part is essential, since it makes it clear that the Children are her primary interest at this point. If she didn't mention these things beforehand it would look like she was trying to hide something when they came up in sessions, and then Okada would be in the position of trying to evaluate whether or not she was a suitable caretaker and possibly even trying to figure out how he can separate her from the Children.

As to whether or not she'd bring it up: the kids know about this thanks to Instrumentality, so she's already been called on it. Instrumentality changed all of the characters in various ways: it made Shinji more resolved to take action rather than let things happen around him, it made Asuka more open to the efforts of others when they're trying to help her, and it made Misato drastically reassess her priorities. It may be a bit of a leap when it comes to her character as portrayed in NGE, but for my purposes the Children are her primary concern now that the world isn't in danger of ending, and full disclosure to their primary therapist is a big part of that. It demonstrates to him that there is no conflict of interest here, and it helps him put their struggles into the proper context. I don't know if this comes across properly in the scene, or if it should be changed to more accurately reflect this, but I feel the revelation is absolutely necessary.

Anyway, that said, new scene! I think this one works well on its own, but I'm not sure how it interacts with the January 28, 2016 scene. I think it's suitably complementary, but we'll see how outside eyes perceive it.

January 14, 2016

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Next: I'm not sure I need that other Misato/Shinji scene after all. So, maybe Fuyu? I think he's next chronologically. No, wait, O-ki-na-wa! is first. So probably the first scene of that, and then Fuyu.

New chapter! This one's been holding me up for weeks, since it's not what I wanna be working on right now. But I think it came out okay. Comments, etc.

August 11, 2016

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Next: The Beach, and then another Shinji/Misato scene. And then we get to the good stuff!

And here we have another barely edited piece. I'm sure you lot will be kind enough to point out any errors/moments of idiocy, and I'll fix them once you do. But in the meantime, here goes: The Talk.

August 12, 2016

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Next: Misato/Okada, possibly with a callback to episode 15 in-between. Then another Misato/Shinji, and possibly a Shinji/Asuka scene on the beach. After that the final five, assuming inspiration doesn't strike in the meantime.

Alrighty then, short and sweet:

December 7, 2018

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To my surprise, the Pen Pen scene stands on its own quite nicely. This amounts to an omake, but I think it's important to note that (somehow) the little guy is still around.

April 09, 2021

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I fully admit the second part is a work in progress, but I think the two scenes mostly flow pretty well. Comments/etc welcome, as always. Pen Pen chapter will be going up next, and after that another Asuka/Misato (last one), Shinji/Misato, Misato/Okada, and then the endgame: O-ki-na-wa!, Fuyutsuki, Kaji, Kyoko, and Katsuragi. Apart from the last the endgame chapters will all involve multiple scenes. I'm not sure if I'll clump them together a la the first and fifth posted pieces or if I'll break them up and tell them piecemeal; it all depends on how things flow, I guess.

April 6, 2021

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Asuka: Here, do this one. There's a lot to work with there.
Bagheera: What? I thought you said you were tired.
A: Never mind that. Just do it.
B: I believe your exact words were "Fuck off, I'm tired."
A: Are you actually arguing with me?
B: . . .
A: Well?
B: Shinji's right, you're impossible.
A: Heh.

Misato and the good doctor will have to wait, I guess. So it goes. Not sure about the date on this one; it feels like it should be a couple months later along, but OTOH Hikari really should show up sometime in the week after Asuka gets back from Kyoto, so whatever. I guess it works whenever.

September 12, 2018

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As always, feedback is appreciated. Next time: Misato and Dr. Okada. Probably.

So, Asuka told me to fuck off for awhile. Said she was tired or something. Anyway, I saw the fourth chapter of Afterwards... by Paul Hodges (pwhodges at EvaGeeks) and got to thinking about how I think Shinji would handle that, and how his victim should respond. So, now we have a bit with Touji! I'm going with that spelling of his name for now, since it feels right for some reason. No telling if it will stick. As for the chapter, it's short. I can't tell if that means it's inadequate or just wonderfully dense with information. Maybe both, maybe neither. Maybe you can tell me! Anyway, here goes:

August 26, 2016

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Next: Hopefully Dr. Okada and Misato, AKA War Crimes. Look forward to it!

Okay, edits! The very first scene has been edited a bit, as I didn't like the ending. The most recent scene has also been edited, but only to remove the last line -- too saccharine for my tastes. And, as noted, the OCs' names have changed. Here's what I've got:

Dr. Okada has become Dr. Shiori Okada -- "Okada" in the real world is the president of Gainax. "Shiori" means "flowing" or "bending" -- appropriate for a general therapist who tries different approaches to help people, and suggestive of rivers  and water in general.
Dr. Sakishima has become Dr. Manaka Sakishima -- Both names are from Nagi no Asukara, an anime with deep ties to the sea.
Dr. Kobayashi has become Dr. Kotetsu -- the Kotetsu was an Imperial era battleship, a relic of the past.
Prof. Nakamura has become Prof. Hibiki Kohaku -- "Hibiki" is a research vessel in the modern Japanese fleet. Kohaku is just a name I liked.

Ironically, I think I got it closer to Anno's actual methodology by saying "fuck it"; many of his names, including Shinji's, are not for boats. It's obvious I just need to relax and name people as I like.

The naming pattern will be obvious to anyone who cares to Google the names, so have at it. It will take awhile to post all the edits, so please bear with me.

Oh yeah, new scene. It's very rough, and probably needs to be edited/expanded, but whatever, I think it does what it needs to do:

September 14, 2018

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Next scene: Asuka learns the nitty gritty about Yui Ikari. IOW, EXPOSITION. Might or might not involve Dr. Hibiki, Misato, Fuyutsuki, others.

Also, I really need to do a few scenes without Asuka. Because, holy shit man, you'd think the world revolved around her or something in this fic. That isn't my intent, but biases are what they are.  ;D

I tried to write out a therapy scene with Asuka's other psychologist, but quickly realized I had nothing to say. I have no experience with EMDR (or, indeed, any other technique for treating sexual trauma), and I couldn't see any other way the scene was advancing the story. So, I dropped it. This is probably for the best. As such, I've moved on to Shinji's confession! I'm sure nothing bad could possibly happen. This is probably in dire need of editing, but it's been awhile since I posted anything of substance so I've been itching to get it out there. Be prepared for serious mood whiplash.

October 13, 2019

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Comments gratefully accepted.

Up next:
09/2018: Why Asuka didn't go back to Germany
09/2018: Why Hello, Dr. Hachijyo! Let me introduce you to a wounded tiger. Careful, she bites.
04/2019: A mother's work, aka Asuka learns the truth about Yui Ikari

Along with the stuff I've mentioned previously. No idea which is coming next, actually; have to see where my mood takes me.

This fic has gotten stupid large. Also, this is the longest scene yet, which means it's actually a proper length. So hooray, I guess? I'll probably be editing it -- I've only made a single pass through it so far -- but I wanted to get this out there for y'all to chew on. Some notes:
  • Dr. Okada, per Japanese convention, refers to people by their family names. His use of "Mr." or "Miss" parallels the article "san", and when he refers to Shinji as "Ikari" it should be read as "Ikari-kun". If there is a better way to handle this please let me know. Also let me know if I slipped up anywhere -- he shouldn't ever be calling Asuka or Shinji by their given names, and as I noted he should never call Shinji "Mr. Ikari".
  • As I've noted elsewhere, I really hate psychologists who are portrayed as cold and detached, and this is especially common in Evangelion fics. They aren't like that. They need to cultivate an atmosphere of trust and openness, and that means they need to be friendly and understanding. In that respect Dr. Okada is similar to most therapists I've met -- professional and detached, but open and good humored. I hope this came across well.
  • I think the flow of the piece works pretty well; I tried not to be repetitive, and I tried not to get too bogged down in details. If it works, tell me. If it doesn't work, tell me that too. Just tell me what you think one way or the other.
Here we go:

June 1, 2020

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Upcoming scenes:
??/07/2016 - Shinji and Misato, right after Asuka leaves for Kyoto
??/??/???? - Shinji and Dr. Okada
??/11/2018 - Asuka and Hikari
??/??/2019 - Shinji's confession
??/??/2020 - "Soryu lives!", aka "Kensuke, what the fuck did you do?"
??/03/2021 - O-ki-na-wa!
~2022 - What the devil does Asuka do, anyway?
~2022 - Shinji's early days at Herz
~2024 - Homecoming
~2026 - Rebirth (true)

I think that's all I have planned for the moment. Stay tuned.

Cello, pt. 2. I'm mostly satisfied with this, though I think the ending is far too upbeat given the time period. But whatever -- they have to have some ups to balance out the downs, or they'll just give up and slit their throats within a week. So fuck it, I'm running with it. Enjoy.

March 14, 2016

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Next: Last Saturday Night. Oh ho. Oh ho ho.

As promised, here's the Asuka/Touji scene. I'm mostly happy with it, so please let me know what you think!

September 16, 2018

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